In this moment...

Okay, in most cases I haven't included the prewriting/freewriting we did in preparation for the haiku writing, but I wanted to post these examples, both to show what we draw the haiku poems from, and also because these three just had some really super-tough imagery that I wanted to make sure to highlight.


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Ms. Vazzana, Rm. 104, 3rd grade


In this moment (freewrite)
Jhoan B.

In this moment I have chapped hands and the season is changing weather and it is cold. The leaves are changing color and the trees are throwing the leaves and all the trees are losing leaves. And we have to wear coats jackets and the leaves are not growing. People do not go out and play. In this moment people are talking in their houses and I can’t hear it. In the world the earth moves but you cannot feel it because it is moving too slowly. You cannot see the stars because they are too far far far far far away. The president is living in a big house and you’re not. And leaves are yellow and it is raining a lot and leaves are not growing. And it is cold. People do not go out again because it is cold and my teacher is wearing a red shirt and my teacher is writing in a paper and I am writing a lot and my best friend is Miguel. And my teacher is sitting with me. And I am at school working in my classroom. 104 3rd grade November 14, 2007. Jhoan B. is making this story and Omar is funny and I am too.


In this moment (freewrite)…
Kevin C.

In this moment leaves are falling and they’re changing clothes and they’re falling like a parachute each day and they’re living trees bold and cold wind is flying in air. Pencil writing in paper and paper smashing in the ground and people talking heart beating. In this moment I see the color green and the color white and the color purple and the color orange.


Things outsides
Hazael G.

In this moment the trees are dying.

In this moment all the flowers are crying.

The cars are cool.

In this moment the storms are giving thunder.

In this moment the firefighters’ alarm is ringing.

Everyone has purple folders

Haikusplosion

Last week, we read a wide selection of haiku poetry (by Basho, Hideno, Richard Wright, Etheridge Knight, Jorge Luis Borges, and others), discussed the form, and did some extensive prewriting and freewriting to capture moments and generate some raw material. This week, we were ready to write our own! I've included some that adhered particularly well to the traditional haiku structure, but just as much I've included some poems that captured the spirit of a haiku. More to come from the other classes next week!


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Ms. Vilchis, Rm. 202, 3rd grade


Haiku
Miguel C.

My mom is cooking foods.
I see blue sky.
I hear rocks crushing each other.


Haiku
Daniel R.

I am hearing steps
from Mrs. Vilchis and Mrs. J
walking through the stars


Haiku
Nicole O.

In this moment the leaves are
blowing away. I heard the noise
of an El.


Haiku
Carlos

I hear the music
of the head like a twisted heart
in a practice band.


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Ms. Hamdan, Rm. B15, 3rd grade


Haiku
Giselle H.

I’m thinking to stop
thinking. Leaves changing colors.
I know what to say.


Haiku
Ashley A.

I am cleaning my room
and I do not want nobody to go
inside of my room.


Haiku
Melissa V.

I am winter and
shivering and
tivery and the
snow is white.


Haiku
Nestor H.

My baby brother
Camilo is crying for
milk in a bottle.